RQ and Topic Pr Page
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: Irene Cradduck______________
Paper author’s name: __Rachel Stinson________
Comment: Throughout her paper, Rachel mentioned both her old and new documents at the beginning and she also used quotes from the sources that she found in order to support her thesis and ideas. She also mentions the controversy of video games and that it creates more violent people.
Comment: Rachel did contain a clear forcast that mentioned exactly what she was going to discuss in her paper. Something she could work on is that instead of including an interesting story later on in her paper she should add it at the begging of her paper to grab her reader’s attention.
Comment: She did seem to have a research question that was answered in her thesis, however, it could have been more clearly stated. It seems that the thesis was more emphasized but not the research question.
Comment: Rachel did a great job in quoting many of her sources and then later disccused them in her own words. This helped her support her thesis and the ideas that she mentioned.
Comment: She clearly stated the issue that the media has caused a false perception of the criminal justice system. She also supported this ideas by the many quotes and the explanations she provided.
Comment: Rachel clearly stated her thesis and the ideas she mentioned all throughout her paper in her conclusion. Something she could fix is that she could reword her original points so it doesnt sound like it is simply being repeated.
Comment: I saw a couple of citations throughout her paper, however, I think that there could have been more and she could have used some information from the sources that she found.
Comment: When reading Rachel’s paper I did not find any grammatical errors. Some sentences were repeated and could have been reworded other ways so it did not seem repetitive.
Peer Editing Process: The 3Research Project
Reviewers name: ___Irene Cradduck_____
Paper author’s name: ______Victoria Sell_____
Comment: Victoria clearly states the controvery of her topic and refers to the sources she found.
Comment: In Victoria’s paper she did have an a good attention grabber in her introduction paragraph. She could have, however, had a more clear forecast of what she was going to discuss in her paper.
Comment: She did stater her research question and then answered it at the end of her paper. She could have made her thesis more clear at the beggining of her paper.
Comment: Victoria did quote some of her sources and talked about them a little bit afterwards.
Comment: She did state what question she was going to discuss in her paper but she could have stated her thesis more clearly and what she believed more at the beggining of her paper.
Comment: She did sum up her beliefs at the end of the paper and discussed some of the points she made in her paper.
Comment: She did discuss about some of the sources she found but she did not have a Works Cited page and had some In-text citations but could have included more.
Comment: There were some grammatical errors and punctuation errors that could have been fixed.
