Revising the 1Report Assignment

          By reading the example paper and reading the three reports from the people in our class I realized that there are many things I need to improve on in order to turn in a Final Draft. Some of them were little details that I forgot to add such as the page numbers at the end and also maybe inserting more parenthetical citations were they correspond. In addition, I need to fix some grammatical errors that sometimes appeared throughout my paper.
            I also think that my paper is more focused on the biography of John Muir and the ideas he had on Ecology. Instead I think I need to summarize more of the letter or document he wrote which was intended for the organization he created, called The Sierra Club. I hope to focus more on the content of his document. Then later talk about what he says his ideas were on the field of Ecology during the length of the letter.
            While I was at the writing center to review my paper the reviewer said that I had a lot of information which was beneficial to my paper, however, she thought that I should focus more on Muir's ideas of Ecology through his eyes instead of just writing a biography or plainly stating the ideas. The reviewer also pointed out that many times during my paper I used the word 'also' which signified that I had to either use an alternative word or simply eliminate it from my paper.
           I also noticed that many of the comments people added while reviewing other individuals' paper's were about needing to rephrase a sentence because it didn't make sense or it was too wordy, which might be something I need to change in my own paper. Overall I think there are little details that I need fix throughout my paper and more importantly I need to focus more on summarizing the document at the begging of my paper and continually mention it during the whole length of my report.